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What's-his-name off that thing

I found this, and while I think it may have potential, it needs a heart transplant (metaphorically of course, or maybe not. I didn't check to see who wrote it. Maybe the guy has heart problems. Maybe it's too late. If it is, someone please apologize to his friends and family for me.) Smokin' Cheddar BBQ: The King of the Triangular Snackfoods 02:38, 29 April 2009 (UTC)

I don't understand why you're putting this on Pee Review. So you maybe kind of sort of want to rewrite this but you're not sure if you should so you want an opinion on what needs fixing? If that's the case, I'd say go with your gut, improve the article in a way you feel is appropriate, and then ask for a review. If you don't intend to work on this, well, there's no point in having it reviewed, then.

I have no intention of reviewing this right now. I just put the PRIP tag on there to annoy Under User. Hi, UU! --Pleb SYNDROME _{CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!)} 02:42, 8 May 2009 (UTC)

This seems like it could be a collaboration. I don't know. It's not a bad article, it's a good concept, and I don't want to see it die, or suffer a life worth than death if I use my gut to rewrite it.-- Whore cHeDDaR 02:47,8May,2009

You did really good with that article about getting over Jenny (that was you, right?) so I don't understand your reluctance to try writing this. And since you don't know who wrote it, it seems odd that you would want to collaborate on it. What if the author doesn't want to change it at all? --Pleb SYNDROME _{CUN medicate (butt poop!!!!)} 03:01, 8 May 2009 (UTC)

I don't know. If you don't want it reviewed, than I guess it doesn't make a huge difference. I guess I'll see what I can do. Maybe contact the writer or something.-- Whore cHeDDaR 11:03,8May,2009

There's no real author, huh? Okay, here goes... Remember, I use 7 to equal an average score   Le Cejak • <7:03 May 28, 2009>

What's-his-name off that thing is being reviewed by CajekHi! Your Source for Fine Scented Pee And Whatever Else Comes Out Of Him

Humour:	6.3	avg of all sections... Introduction (7/10): Well, it's sorta funny in that it goes over the top for vagueness. I hope the rest of the article isn't just this same joke over and over, though. 1.1 School or something (8/10): I smiled a little, because the joke works. I don't know what I would add here. 1.2 University or somewhere (6/10): It's all over the place. Getting sloppy. What's that thing where there's lots of sex jokes in a review? What's that called, with the yew tree? 2 Movie Roles (5/10): This is driving me crazy, I can't think of that thing, you know? Where the same joke happens over and over again and it means the matrix is malfunctioning? 3 Music Career (5/10): What's that thing called where a joke goes on so long that it dies? What's that thing called? What- it's on the tip of my- you know, the thing you eat with? No, not the mouth, the other thing. The- the, uh thing in the mouth, that's what it's on the tip of. No, not the penis, that's the thing in the pants that does that thing, what's it called? Oh, a massive erection. 4 Politics (7/10): What's it called when something goes on and on, but then the reader starts to get used to the joke and it's not boring anymore? What's it called when an article has an obvious theme that's obvious to the reader and at first it's like "oh, look, I'm explaining a joke very slowly to you like you're a child" and you're like "I've had enough of this crap" and you almost go to another article, but the article is like "Hey, I've got a new angle and I know it's stupid but hey, we're just trying to have fun"? What's that called?
Concept:	6	Uh, well, it's very repetitive and obvious. The reader knows the gig, so the article has to rely on craziness, but it can only do so for so long. I don't know how good this article could be. With a few more sections this thing could either turn into gold or shit. I'm torn.
Prose and formatting:	7	The formatting's okay I guess. Some paragraphs could be broken up to give our eyes a break, and some more pictures would be nice.
Images:	6	Meh. Just a single picture? Why not have one where you take a random artist's picture and blur it or something? Go into photoshop and add fog in front of a person's face! Do something!
Miscellaneous:	6.3	{{Pee}}
Final Score:	31.6	Yeah, this is a good rewrite candidate: not too bad, but in need of a fix.
Reviewer:	Le Cejak • <7:03 May 28, 2009>